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What is the most dangerous thing in your home? How can your home be made less dangerous?
The door of the room. When the wind blows to inside the house from outside, it pushes the door to shut, bang! And that could cause someone to hurt.
And the other one is gas range. That is why we are going to change it with induction range

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Hi, U Seung!

Oh, yeah! I think you should really have an induction range because it's way safer. I am also thinking about changing mine to induction as well. 

Thank you for sharing!

~T. Roanne ^_^
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The door of the room. 
>> Correct! 
When the wind blows to inside the house from outside, it pushes the door to shut, bang! And that could cause someone to hurt.
>> Correct! 
And the other one is gas range. 
>> Correct! 
That is why we are going to change it with induction range
>> Correct! 
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