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What negative effect can technology bring to our lives? Share your idea in a few sentences.

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Technology is comming closly, and day by day our lives become comfortably. but we must focus other impect what our envirenment is covered with a lot of tech, so we depende on that. so we can't have own thounght simply. because a lot of arlam is occured for me. that is nagative impact.

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Hi there, Jisu!

Truly, technology not only comes with great things but also with negative results. If we look at how we dispose off our gadgets, their parts cannot be recycled and we need more and more parts to produce one technolofy everyday. Thus, we have to conserve our resources as well as balance the use of our technology to preserve what is left of us.

Thank you for this full-length homework and all of your efforts and thoughts shared.

See you!

-T. Donna =)

Technology is comming closly, and day by day our lives become comfortably. 
>> Technology is coming closely, and day by day our lives become more comfortable. 

but we must focus other impect what our envirenment is covered with a lot of tech, so we depende on that. 
>> But, we must focus on the other impacts on our envirenment since it covers a lot of technology, we depend on them much. 

so we can't have own thounght simply. 
>> So, we can't have our own simple thoughts about it.

because a lot of arlam is occured for me. 
>> This situation alarms me.

that is nagative impact.
>> That is a negative impact.
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