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What beautiful place do you recommend traveling to in Korea? Share your answer in a few sentences.

Jeju Island is a famous tourist attraction for many people. So I want to introduce unknown well place Nami island. Nami Island is close to Pyeongchang where the Olympics were held. There are famous for the filming location for the drama and beautiful nature in all seasons.

Have a happy evening Donna!

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Good evening Hae Ju!

Nami Island sounds so intriguing. Now I know more islands in Korea aside from Dokdo and Jejudo. I am sure that it is as breathtaking as the others. Anyway, your sentences are long and have very few mistakes, congratulations!

Have a great night!

-T. Donna =) 

Jeju Island is a famous tourist attraction for many people. 
>> Correct!

So I want to introduce unknown well place Nami island. 
>>  So I want to introduce an unknown well place called Nami island. 

Nami Island is close to Pyeongchang where the Olympics were held. 
>> Correct!

There are famous for the filming location for the drama and beautiful nature in all seasons.
>> This is famous for being a  filming location for the drama and its beautiful nature in all seasons.

Have a happy evening Donna!
>> Correct!
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