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Do you think that you should change your eating habits?

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Yes, I can do it. But it's hard to change my eating habits that I usually eat food at midnight. It's because I feel very be hangry at that time. And I enjoy eating ramen, chicken, pizza and hamburger at midnight. It can make me getting more full than eating at other times. So it should take a long time.

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Hi Elic!  

I'm guilty of that as well but we need to change it because it is bad for our health. hahaha!

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Yes, I can do it. But it's hard to change my eating habits that I usually eat food at midnight. 
>> Yes, I can do it but it's hard to change my eating habits wherein I eat food during midnight. 

It's because I feel very be hangry at that time. 
>> It's because I feel very hangry at that time. 

And I enjoy eating ramen, chicken, pizza and hamburger at midnight. 
>> CORRECT

It can make me getting more full than eating at other times. 
>> It can make me more full than eating other food sometimes. 

So it should take a long time.
>> CORRECT
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