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We must not forgive breaking out war and invasion tn the international society although any reason.

We must not forgive behavial that break and threat of our peace and life.

It is not enough that providing humanitarian aids th the war-torn countries.

I agree that send weapons and troops.

We have to protest positively each other.

We have to leave lesson that evoking a war is eventually to be isolate and to be fail.

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Hello Ms. Lily!
I agree with you on this! We cannot avoid to blame the country that invoke war. 
Thank you for this!
Have a  great day!
Aki~
We must not forgive breaking out war and invasion in the international society although any reason.
>>> We must not forgive the break-out war and invasion in the international society although in any reason.
We must not forgive behavial that break and threat of our peace and life.
>>> We must not forgive behaviors that break and threaten our peace and life.
It is not enough that providing humanitarian aids th the war-torn countries.
>>> It is not enough that provide humanitarian aid to the war-torn countries.
I agree that send weapons and troops.
>>> I agree with sending weapons and troops.
We have to protest positively each other.
>>> We have to protest positively to each other.
We have to leave lesson that evoking a war is eventually to be isolate and to be fail.
>>> We have to leave the lesson that evoking a war is eventually to be isolated and failed
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