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Q) What is your favorite home chore? Share your thoughts in a few sentences.

A) My favorite home chore is washing. I choose white underwear and pastel-tone's clouthe. and first of all, I put in the washing machine. and after than I hang laundry on rooftop. That's the point.

I don't use dryer because of I like hanging in a sun. Direct sunlight is the best Dryer.
And after Drying, the smell of lundry is my favorite.


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Q) What can men do that woman cannot? Share your idea in a few sentences.

A) Generally Men's physical is better than woman. Their muscle and bone shape is bigger. Therefore they can do better something that tough work. For example, making the house, handling of heavy thing. because of the gap of physical, they can endure until they get success. but women have the weakness at that point. Besides, if they get pregnant in their life, they can't continue their dream. Basically, because of gap of men and woman's physical system, a lot of things accured.

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Good evening, Jisu!

It seemed like you had a very productive holiday answering two homework questions. It only means that you are very serious about imporving your skills in English. That is very reassuring. 

For one, your favorite house chore is my second favorite. Doing laundry needs passion and strength to make all of your clothes look, feel, and smell like brand new.

Meanwhile, for the second homework question, me's physical strength is really their gift. We can also be as strong as them but let's just give them those tasks to literally carry the heavy loads.

Overall, your ideas are very clearly presented. For grammar, you had a very few slips. Thus, kindly read and go over the suggestions made below. I trully appreciate all the time and effort you devote in drafting and submitting your homework answers. Always keep up your brilliant ideas and your hard work!

See you soon!

-T. Donna =)

Q) What is your favorite home chore? Share your thoughts in a few sentences.

A) My favorite home chore is washing. 
>> Correct!

I choose white underwear and pastel-tone's clouthe. 
>>  I choose white underwear and pastel-tone clothes. 

and first of all, I put in the washing machine. 
>> First of all, I put them in the waching machine.

and after than I hang laundry on rooftop. That's the point.
>>  And after that,  I hang the laundry on the rooftop. That's the point.

I don't use dryer because of I like hanging in a sun. 
>> I don't use the dryer because I like hanging clothes under the sun. 

Direct sunlight is the best Dryer.
>> Correct!
Or: Direct sunlight is the best dryer.

And after Drying, the smell of lundry is my favorite.
>> And after drying, the smell of the lundry is my favorite.


6/6 :

Q) What can men do that woman cannot? Share your idea in a few sentences.

A) Generally Men's physical is better than woman. 
>>  Generally, men's 9physical body/physique) is better than woman. 

Their muscle and bone shape is bigger. 
>> Their muscles and bones' shapes are bigger.

Therefore they can do better something that tough work. 
>> Therefore, they can do better with things that require tough work. 

For example, making the house, handling of heavy thing. 
>> For example, they are good at making the house and handling heavy things. 

because of the gap of physical, they can endure until they get success. 
>> Because of the physical gap, they can endure until they get successful.

but women have the weakness at that point. 
>> Correct!
Or: But women have their weakness at that point.

Besides, if they get pregnant in their life, they can't continue their dream. 
>> Correct!

Basically, because of gap of men and woman's physical system, a lot of things accured.
>> Basically, because of the gap between men and woman's physical system, a lot of things occur.
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