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yes, i like to advertising people. i think advertising is really help to other people.
but in korea, many young people don't like to hearing other's advertising.
because they think adult's advertising is so boring.
likewise, sometimes when i advertising to younger than me, i'm hesitate a little.

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Hi, Jumi. Happy Tuesday!
Thank you for sending me your homework. Me too, I also like advising other people. I hope I can hear your bits of advice for me. 
See you later in class. ^^
~Teacher ERIN

yes, i like to advertising people.
>>Yes, I like advising other people.
 i think advertising is really help to other people.
>>I think giving other people some pieces of advice will help them.
but in korea, many young people don't like to hearing other's advertising.
>>But in Korea, many young people don't like hearing the advice of others.
because they think adult's advertising is so boring.
>>They think that the adult's advice is boring.
likewise, sometimes when i advertising to younger than me, i'm hesitate a little.
>>As an adult, I also hesitate sometimes to advise people who are younger than me. 
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