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How would you describe your family? / What is your ideal family structure?

작성자: 김*소
2022-06-08 499

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There are parents, two boys and two girls. I have parents, two younger brother and one younger sister. My family is big and noisy. Just these six member only live together. I think my family is hard family strcture. 3 to 4 members is best family strutue I think, for example, parents and one daughter and one son. If family is big like my family, of course it is good for society but members of that family will be so hard to live because they will have to share everything such as mother's love and clothes with their brother or sister and will have to give up many things like a room that they can use alone(they will have to share their room too.). Parents make same money like other parents, but children's benefit is different. However if there are parents and two children, children will not feel lonely and will take more opportunity than big family's children. So ideal family struture I think is family of 3 to 4 members.

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Hi Sally, 
Family is the primary source of learning that provides enormous positive energy and can make you conquer many things. The family will tell you what you do not want to hear, but they do it out of love to help you grow. And family relationships provide resources that can help an individual cope with stress, engage in healthier behaviors, and enhance self-esteem, leading to higher well-being. An ideal family is one in which every member has a very good understanding of each other. They live life without any disputes, spend time with each other, talk to each other everyday, and always help each other. " A family is where LIFE begins and LOVE never ends." ~ Teacher QUENNY..

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There are parents, two boys and two girls.
>> There are 6 members in my family including my parents with two boys and two girls. 
 I have parents, two younger brother and one younger sister. 
>>  I have my parents and I'm the eldest in the family, there are two younger brothers and one younger sister. 
My family is big and noisy. Just these six member only live together.
>> My family is big and noisy. Just these six members-only and live together.
 I think my family is hard family strcture. 
>> I think my family is not my ideal family structure. 
3 to 4 members is best family strutue I think, for example, parents and one daughter and one son. 
>> I think the ideal family structure is with 3 to 4 members of the family only including parents with one daughter and one son.
If family is big like my family, of course it is good for society but members of that family will be so hard to live because they will have to share everything such as mother's love and clothes with their brother or sister and will have to give up many things like a room that they can use alone(they will have to share their room too.). 
>> If the family is big like my family, of course, it is good for the society but members of that family will have a difficult life because they have to share everything such as their mother's love, and clothes with their brother or sister and also have to give up many things like a room that they can use alone they have to share their room too with the other members of the family. 
Parents make same money like other parents, but children's benefit is different. However if there are parents and two children, children will not feel lonely and will take more opportunity than big family's children. 
>> Parents make the same money as other parents do, but children's benefit is different. However, if there are parents and two children only, children will not feel lonely and will take more opportunities than a big family with many children. 
So ideal family struture I think is family of 3 to 4 members.
>> So the ideal family structure I think is a family of 3 to 4 members only. 

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There are parents, two boys and two girls. I have parents, two younger brother and one younger sister. My family is big and noisy. Just these six member only live together. I think my family is hard family strcture. 3 to 4 members is best family strutue I think, for example, parents and one daughter and one son. If family is big like my family, of course it is good for society but members of that family will be so hard to live because they will have to share everything such as mother's love and clothes with their brother or sister and will have to give up many things like a room that they can use alone(they will have to share their room too.). Parents make same money like other parents, but children's benefit is different. However if there are parents and two children, children will not feel lonely and will take more opportunity than big family's children. So ideal family struture I think is family of 3 to 4 members.
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