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Why do you think facing death is a difficult experience? How can a person cope with it?

작성자: 김*연
2022-06-09 654

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Losing someone is a deep sorrow than any others for human. Maybe it will same for animals. I also had an experience losing my dad when I was 20 years old. That was a kind of separation between my dad and I because of the death. Like this, many people feel a sense of loss when their person gone. It hurt the mind, spirit and even body. Sometimes it took so much time to be recovered. However, there are also some solution. In my case, my family is faithful christian. So when my dad passed away, we can believe he will stay as a soul with us and in heaven. It helped to calm down. So the faith is very important I think. It doesn't mean all people have to be men of religion. However, we need to believe, our soul is eternal even the body disappered. It will help to face death and cope with it.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Arissa, 

Thank you for sharing your thoughts about my question. I sincerely appreciate you for opening up and I admire you for being strong. 
I also experienced losing my grandfather 15 years ago and my grandmother two years ago. They both lived with us until the end.
As you mentioned, losing someone makes us feel that deep sorrow. However, faith helps us cope with it since we believe that their soul will be eternal, and as Christians, we believe that they will be in heaven where they will feel peace and no longer feel pain or any suffering. 
The pain and sadness we feel can be calmed down by believing that. 

~ Teacher Gina

Losing someone is a deep sorrow than any others for human. Maybe it will same for animals. I also had an experience losing my dad when I was 20 years old. That was a kind of separation between my dad and I because of the death. Like this, many people feel a sense of loss when their person gone. It hurt the mind, spirit and even body. Sometimes it took so much time to be recovered. However, there are also some solution. In my case, my family is faithful christian. So when my dad passed away, we can believe he will stay as a soul with us and in heaven. It helped to calm down. So the faith is very important I think. It doesn't mean all people have to be men of religion. However, we need to believe, our soul is eternal even the body disappered. It will help to face death and cope with it.

>> Losing someone is a deep sorrow than any other for humans. Maybe it is the same for animals. I also had an experience losing my dad when I was 20 years old. That was a kind of separation between my dad and me because of death. Like this, many people feel a sense of loss when their person is gone. It hurts the mind, spirit, and even body. Sometimes it takes so much time to recover. However, there are also some solutions. In my case, my family is a faithful Christian. So when my dad passed away, we believed he would stay as a soul with us and in heaven. It helped us to calm down. So faith is very important, I think. It doesn't mean all people have to be men of religion. However, we need to believe that our soul is eternal even if the body has disappeared. It will help to face death and cope with it.
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