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Exactly, we develop personality because of what happens to us.
i will explain why have i think
first, they are many examples for reflect to their parents.
maybe all people included this.
second, the trauma power is really strong. many people haves tried to forget the memory which bad, but it's not easy.
and even if i will not explain detailed, many people agreed my opinions!

today's tmi : i'm full. because i ate noodles ^_^

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Hi, Jumi.

Thank you so much for always sending me your homework. I can say that you were very observant, and you have a lot to say in every situation. Keep it up, Jumi! See you tomorrow!

~Teacher ERIN

Exactly, we develop personality because of what happens to us.
>>Exactly! We developed our personalities based on our experiences.

i will explain why have i think
>>Let me explain my opinion.

first, they are many examples for reflect to their parents.
>>First, it is how the parents raise their kids.

maybe all people included this.
>>Maybe, all people are considering this.

second, the trauma power is really strong.
>>Second, the trauma is not easy to handle.

 many people haves tried to forget the memory which bad, but it's not easy.
>>Many people are trying to forget those bad experiences, but it's not easy to escape one's memory.

and even if i will not explain detailed, many people agreed my opinions!
>>And even if I will not explain it in detail, many people would agree with my opinion.

today's tmi : i'm full. because i ate noodles ^_^
>>Today's TMI: I'm full because I ate noodles. ^_^
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