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What is your most dangerous experience in life?

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When I was young, I went to the tall mountain in South Korea.
And I was standing on the massive rock, and then, I might fall from a high place.
But now, I think it was not that serious thing, but still, I think it is the most dangerous experience in my life.

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Hi John!  

That is dangerous. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

When I was young, I went to the tall mountain in South Korea.
>>When I was young, I went to the tall mountain of South Korea.

And I was standing on the massive rock, and then, I might fall from a high place.
>> And I was standing on the massive rock and I almost fell down from a high place. 

But now, I think it was not that serious thing, but still, I think it is the most dangerous experience in my life
>> Now, I think it was not that serious but it is still the most dangerous experience I've had in my life. 

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