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Do you still believe in traditional medicines?

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There are things I believe in and things I don't. Example, I believe and acupuncture. When I got it for the first time, I felt better for my ankle. After that, I'm still believe it. But I don't believe when I put soybean paste on a bee sting. :)

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Hi Elic!  

I've always wanted to try that but I never had the chance. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

There are things I believe in and things I don't. 
>> There are things that I believe in and things that I don't. 

Example, I believe and acupuncture. 
>> Example, I believe in acupuncture. 

When I got it for the first time, I felt better for my ankle. 
>> When I got it for the first time, my ankle felt better. 

After that, I'm still believe it. But I don't believe when I put soybean paste on a bee sting. :)
>> After that, I believe that it works. On the other hand, I don't believe in putting soybean paste on a bee sting. :) 
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