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That would, definitely, be a super car. My dream car is the Lamborghini Aventador.
The fact that I own it means that I've already made a huge success. I've always dreamt of myself driving that super car through the main gate of the apartment complex where I live, watching all of the residents that look surprised to see my car. Everyone would have imagined that kind of scene at least one time in his life.

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Hi U Seung!  

Yes, we should invest our money into important things and we have to consider a lot of things in terms of way of living. 

PS: That's amazing! You indeed are a successful person since you have a super car. Hahaha!

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

That would, definitely, be a super car. 
>> That would be definitely a super car.

My dream car is the Lamborghini Aventador.
>> CORRECT

The fact that I own it means that I've already made a huge success. 
>> CORRECT

I've always dreamt of myself driving that super car through the main gate of the apartment complex where I live, watching all of the residents that look surprised to see my car. 
>> CORRECT

Everyone would have imagined that kind of scene at least one time in his life.
>> CORRECT
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