¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽг»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Saipan

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: À¯*¿µ
2022-06-18 459

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

What was the most interesting place you have traveled?
Before I get a job, I traveled the Saipan with my husband. I couldn't forget the experience. First day, we borrowed the rent car, Camaro which is open car. We runed the load of the beach. I wanted to see the sea more close. So, I asked my husband "How about we enters the sand." After seeing the sea, We wanted to out the sand of the beach. Unfortunately, my car was stuck in the sand. while we was trying to pull out the car, the host of the sand came. At the moment, my husband didn't know that he is the host of the sand. My husband acted curt. The host charged the fee. Because We was in the private land. The fee was quite expensive. I begged from my bottle of heart. Thankfully, the host forgave me. I think the host want to let me know the respect about the private land. I have got a lot of lessons.

-I purchased the 5 times laser ticket.
-It was a one day class. It took a 3 hours.
-I'm one of the got a money back.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi, Young!

Thank you for sharing your thoughts on this one. 
See you later!

~T. Roanne ^_^ 
======================================================
Before I get a job, I traveled the Saipan with my husband. 
>> Before I get a job, I traveled to Saipan with my husband. 
I couldn't forget the experience. 
>> Correct!
First day, we borrowed the rent car, Camaro which is open car. 
>> On the first day, we borrowed a rental car, Camaro, which is an open car. 
We runed the load of the beach. 
>> We drove the road along the beach. 
I wanted to see the sea more close. 
>> I wanted to see the sea closely.
So, I asked my husband "How about we enters the sand." 
>> So, I asked my husband "How about we go into the sand?." 
After seeing the sea, We wanted to out the sand of the beach. 
>> After seeing the sea, We wanted to be out of the sand.
Unfortunately, my car was stuck in the sand. while we was trying to pull out the car, the host of the sand came. 
>> Unfortunately, my car was stuck in the sand while we were trying to pull out the car, the owner of the beach came towards us. 
At the moment, my husband didn't know that he is the host of the sand. 
>> At that moment, my husband didn't know that he is the owner of the beach.
My husband acted curt. 
>> Correct!
The host charged the fee. Because We was in the private land. 
>> The host charged us with some fee because we were in the private land.
The fee was quite expensive. 
>> Correct!
I begged from my bottle of heart. 
>>I begged from the bottom of my heart. 
Thankfully, the host forgave me. 
>> Correct!
I think the host want to let me know the respect about the private land. 
>> I think the host wants to let me know to respect  the private land. 
I have got a lot of lessons.
>> Correct!

-I purchased the 5 times laser ticket.
>> Correct!
-It was a one day class. It took a 3 hours.
-It was a one day class. It took about 3 hours.
-I'm one of the got a money back.
>> -I'm one of those who got the money back.
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
120057 Homework ±è*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2022-06-21 527
120056 6/21 HOMEWORKw(゚¬¥゚)w ÀÌ*À¯ ¿Ï·á 2022-06-21 597
120055 HOMEWORK ¹Ú*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2022-06-21 2
120054 [Homework] Q. How is your country¡¯s traditional music different... ÃÖ*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2022-06-21 1
120053 Homework °­*¼± ¿Ï·á 2022-06-21 817
120052 homework ¿ø*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2022-06-21 595
120051 Trade places. ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2022-06-21 1
120050 homework ±è*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2022-06-21 747
120049 What things about morning would you like to change? Why? ÅÂ*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2022-06-21 749
120048 About culture of moving into a new home. ±è*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2022-06-21 1
120047 Homework ÀÌ*°æ ¿Ï·á 2022-06-21 599
120046 What comes to mind when you hear the word ¡®time¡¯? Do you ever... ÅÂ*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2022-06-21 1020
120045 About the time. ±è*À± ¿Ï·á 2022-06-21 545
120044 Do you think getting old is a good thing or a bad thing? Explain... ·ù*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2022-06-21 796
120043 homework ÃÖ*¿ø ¿Ï·á 2022-06-21 730
120042 Would you rather be smart or beautiful or handsome? ±è*ºó ¿Ï·á 2022-06-21 755
120041 What is your favorite summer activity? ±è*ºó ¿Ï·á 2022-06-21 730
120040 Tuesday Homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-06-21 1004
120039 homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-06-21 859
120038 homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-06-21 662

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ ͏°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öư Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽбÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î Çϰí ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04