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What happens when both parents work?

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I want to write down a experience of korea.
In the case of korea, if both parents work, their kids are usually cared for by their grandmthers.
However, I sometimes saw on the TV, the childern cared from their grandmother have various problems during adolescent.
I was saw on the media some childrens who feel very loney, anxiety, and showed a propensity for violence. They really wanted to their parent’s love.
When I watched these medias, I thought that it is very important to conversation between parent and their children.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good day Eun Yeong!
Thank you for this! I guess this is not only in Korea, but in most cases when children are being cared of by their grandparents can grow in a different way. In other cases, they grow to be very conservative and responsible while others are not.
Do you also want to work? Let me know your thought.
Aki~
I want to write down a experience of korea.
>>> I want to write down an experience in Korea.
In the case of korea, if both parents work, their kids are usually cared for by their grandmthers.
>>> In the case of Korea, if both parents work, their kids are usually cared for by their grandmothers.
However, I sometimes saw on the TV, the childern cared from their grandmother have various problems during adolescent.
>>> However, I sometimes saw on the TV, that the children who are cared for by their grandmother have various problems during adolescence.
I was saw on the media some childrens who feel very loney, anxiety, and showed a propensity for violence. They really wanted to their parent’s love.
>>> I saw on the media some children who feel very lonely, and anxious, and showed a propensity for violence. 
They really wanted to their parent’s love.
>>> They really wanted their parent’s love.
When I watched these medias, I thought that it is very important to conversation between parent and their children.
>>> When I watched these media, I thought that it is very important to have conversations between parent and their children.
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