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Do you think getting old is a good thing or a bad thing?

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I think it would absolutely be a bad thing. When I was at teenager, I wanna be an adult fast. But I became a 20s, the time so flies. And I feel scared that I will be a 30s. Also, I'm afraid I'll die without getting married. If she dumps me the next time, I'll curse her. :)

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Hi Elic!  

I think most people feel the same way. Time flies indeed. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I think it would absolutely be a bad thing. 
>> CORRECT

When I was at teenager, I wanna be an adult fast. 
>> When I was  teenager, I wanted to be an adult already. 

But I became a 20s, the time so flies. 
>> But when I was at my 20's, time flew so fast. 

And I feel scared that I will be a 30s. 
>> And I feel scared that I will be in my 30's. 

Also, I'm afraid I'll die without getting married. 
>> I am also afraid of dying without getting married. 

If she dumps me the next time, I'll curse her. :)
>>If she dumps me again next time, I'll curse her. :)

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