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Do you agree that dogs are man\'s best friend? Explain your thought.

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dog is strange animal. dog is different animal. have you thought why only dogs are so friendly with human? well, there is a research explains why dogs are friendly. it says some wild woolf-ish dogs evolved with human for a long times ago. researchers dispute the time however, people assume that it happened 33,000 years ago. we shared our life with this species more than any other animals. some say why dog started live with human is they had a different gene that feel no fear of human. maybe it engraved in their gene, they believed that human are efficient to have a habitat, shelter, protection, and most likely food.
now it has totally changed story however it has the same way that dog is still be with human.
we share our life with dogs by love. like a family members. dogs evolved to be domestic animal by human hands and also human's life changed. we don't need them to hunt, to protect human. people want to share the life with dogs as it always was.

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Hello there Lim!
Thank you for your response in your homework. I gave some simple corrections on yor composition but there is nothing to worry about. Also, be mindful of your CAPITALIZATION when you start a new sentence. That's it, in general. Well done!
Have a great day always!
Aki~
dog is strange animal. 
>>> A dog is strange animal. 
dog is different animal.
>>> A dog is a different animal.
OR >>> A dog is a strange and different animal (Put them as one sentence)
have you thought why only dogs are so friendly with human? 
>>> Have you thought about why only dogs are so friendly to humans? 
well, there is a research explains why dogs are friendly. 
>>> Well, there is research that explains why dogs are friendly.
it says some wild woolf-ish dogs evolved with human for a long times ago. 
>>> It says some wild Woolf-ish dogs evolved with humans a long time ago. 
researchers dispute the time however, people assume that it happened 33,000 years ago. 
>>> Researchers dispute the time however, people assume that it happened 33,000 years ago. 
We shared our life with this species more than any other animal. 
>>> CORRECT!
some say why dog started live with human is they had a different gene that feel no fear of human. 
>>> Some say why dogs started to live with humans is they had a different gene that feels no fear of humans. 
maybe it engraved in their gene, they believed that human are efficient to have a habitat, shelter, protection, and most likely food.
>> Maybe it is engraved in their gene, they believed that humans are efficient to have a habitat, shelter, protection, and most likely food.
now it has totally changed story however it has the same way that dog is still be with human.
>>> Now it has totally changed the story however it has the same way that dog is still with the human.
we share our life with dogs by love. like a family members. 
>>> Now it has totally changed the story however it has the same way that dog is still with the human.
we share our lives with dogs by love. like family members. 
dogs evolved to be domestic animal by human hands and also human's life changed. 
>>> dogs evolved to be domestic animals by human hands and also human life changed. 
We don't need them to hunt, to protect humans. people want to share their life with dogs as it always was.
>>We don't need them to hunt, to protect humans. people want to share their life with dogs as it always was.
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