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I have visited a waterpark. When I was young, my family went waterpark very often. I visited waterpark most recently 4 years ago. Also I visited waterpark with my friend¡¯s family. I like waterpark and there are many reasons. First, I like swimming. I couldn¡¯t swim well, but I like cool feeling when I swimming. Second, I can enjoy something to play with water. I like amusement park and I like water, too. Therefore, I like waterpark. I can ride roller coaster and other thing with cool water. I visited water park when I was young, I can¡¯t visit waterpark recently. I hope to visit waterpark this year.

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Hi Bella!
Your choice of words is really interesting.
You really know how to paint a picture.
Keep improving and believing in yourself.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I have visited a waterpark. 
>> Correct
When I was young, my family went waterpark very often. 
>> When I was young, my family went to waterparks very often. 
I visited waterpark most recently 4 years ago. 
>> The last time I visited a waterpark was 4 years ago. 
Also I visited waterpark with my friend¡¯s family. 
>> Also, I visited a waterpark with my friend¡¯s family. 
I like waterpark and there are many reasons. 
>> I like waterparks and there are many reasons. 
First, I like swimming.
>> Correct
I couldn¡¯t swim well, but I like cool feeling when I swimming.
>> I can't swim well, but I like feeling cool when I'm swimming.
Second, I can enjoy something to play with water. 
>> Second, I can enjoy playing with water. 
I like amusement park and I like water, too. 
>> I like amusement parks and I like water, too. 
Therefore, I like waterpark. 
>> Therefore, I like waterparks. 
I can ride roller coaster and other thing with cool water. 
>> I can ride roller coasters and other things with cool water. 
I visited water park when I was young, I can¡¯t visit waterpark recently. 
>> I used to visit water parks when I was young but I can't do that recently.
I hope to visit waterpark this year.
>> I hope to visit a waterpark this year.
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