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I think the best country in the world is Korea! because The biggest reason is that it is my hometown and there are lots of famous drama,songs,peoples and many different things.if I would choose a country other than Korea, I would like to choose France because it is a country that I really want to visit and there are many pretty buildings!!

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Hi Chloe!  

There really is no place like home. We should be proud of our hometown because it also reflects who we are. :)

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I think the best country in the world is Korea!
>> I think the best country in the world is South Korea!

because The biggest reason is that it is my hometown and there are lots of famous drama,songs,peoples and many different things.
>> The biggest reason is that it is my hometown and there are a lot of dramas, songs, and people here. 

if I would choose a country other than Korea, I would like to choose France because it is a country that I really want to visit and there are many pretty buildings!!
>> If I would choose another country than South Korea, I will choose France because I really want to visit there and see the pretty buildings. 
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