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My favorite Amusement park ride.

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My favorite Amusement park ride is the roller coaster.
Because the roller coaster's waiting time is very short.
My second reason is roller coaster is the fastest ride of all.
My third reason is roller coaster is the longest ride of all.
Finally, roller coasters can get a lot of air.

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Good day, Joey!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

My favorite Amusement park ride is the roller coaster.
>> CORRECT!
Because the roller coaster's waiting time is very short.
>> That's because 
the roller coaster's waiting time is very short.
My second reason is roller coaster is the fastest ride of all.
>> 
My second reason is that the roller coaster is the fastest ride of all.
My third reason is roller coaster is the longest ride of all.
>> 
My third reason is that the roller coaster is the longest ride of all.
Finally, roller coasters can get a lot of air.
>> Finally, we can get enough air if we ride a roller coaster.
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