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We are making social system and policy that other people( govenrnent) raise ane take care of my children.

Yje number of workong moms is growing.

But she is not a working mom, she is willing to let take care of someone else her children.

Even the children enjoy materal abundance but lack interaction and communication with parents.

To conclude, we don't know each other very well.

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Hello Ms. Lily,
Time is the best thing we can invest to our children. Parents who may provide everything but do not give time to their children tend to become a stranger in the sight of their children. Have you heard that children who grew up with their nannies are much closer than with their moms.
Thank you for this!
Aki~

We are making social system and policy that other people( govenrnent) raise ane take care of my children.
>>> We are making a social system and policy that other people( government) raise and take care of my children.

Yje number of workong moms is growing.
>>>The number of working moms are growing.

But she is not a working mom, she is willing to let take care of someone else her children.
>>> But she is not a working mom, she is willing to let someone else take care of her children.

Even the children enjoy materal abundance but lack interaction and communication with parents.
>>> Even the children enjoy material abundance but lack interaction and communication with parents.

To conclude, we don't know each other very well.
>>> CORRECT!
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