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Homework and clarification

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Good evening, Donna~
I was so busy all day.I am still so busy, so I am squeezing the homework in.
Nonetheless I am so happy to do this.
First of all, I want to correct my words.
In this morning class, I said "I usually pay for all by myself". (I mean I like to pay for everything including other people's)
I think you didn't understand the meaning of my words.
Maybe I used the wrong expression.
Next, this is my homework.
For checking skin condition, we use some devices like magnifier, dermoscopy, imaging skin analyzer.
Expecially with imaging skin analyzer, we can see a facial skin precisely.
Good conditions of skin means enough moisturization, bright tone, no inflammatory lesions.
Dark skin, melasma, reduction of elasticity, sagging are also our concerns.
However, they are not medical problems.
For Keeping your skin healthier, you'd better take enough water, get enough sleep, stay away from bad materials like alcohol, cigarette.
I've got to go out. See you tomorrow morning.

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Hello, good evening, Dr. Kim!

You stayed up late at work today. I hope you are feeling fine. It must have been an exhilirating day. Well, thank you for accomplishing your homework regardless of your tight shcedule. Your diligence and hardwork is impressive.

You are right about my misunderstanding of your statement regarding paying for others. Thank you for your very clear explanation about it below. It is a very kind gesture to pay for others especially nowadays that inflation is rocketing.

For your homework answer, generally, all of your sentences were composed so well. I want you to take note of the us of the determiner 'the' for more specific reference versus 'a' which is less specific. Furthermore, the expression 'for keeping' can also mean 'to keep' and the later is more commonly used in everyday English. Nonetheless, you used it correctly. 

Rest well and see you again in the morning. 

-T. Donna ~

Good evening, Donna~
>> Correct!

I was so busy all day.I am still so busy, so I am squeezing the homework in.
>> Correct!

Nonetheless I am so happy to do this.
>> Correct!

First of all, I want to correct my words.
>> Correct!

In this morning class, I said "I usually pay for all by myself". (I mean I like to pay for everything including other people's)
>> (In the morning class/ During the class) I said "I usually pay for all by myself". (I mean I like to pay for everything including other people's.)
Or: In the morning class/ During the class) I said "I usually pay for all by myself". Here, I meant that I like to pay for everything including other people's bills.


I think you didn't understand the meaning of my words.
>> Correct!

Maybe I used the wrong expression.
>> Correct!

Next, this is my homework.
>> Correct!

For checking skin condition, we use some devices like magnifier, dermoscopy, imaging skin analyzer.
>> Correct!

Expecially with imaging skin analyzer, we can see a facial skin precisely.
>> Expecially with the imaging skin analyzer, we can see the facial skin precisely.

Good conditions of skin means enough moisturization, bright tone, no inflammatory lesions.
>> Correct!

Dark skin, melasma, reduction of elasticity, sagging are also our concerns.
>> Correct!

However, they are not medical problems.
>> Correct!

For Keeping your skin healthier, you'd better take enough water, get enough sleep, stay away from bad materials like alcohol, cigarette.
>> Correct!
Or: To keep your skin healthier, you'd better take enough water, get enough sleep, stay away from bad materials like alcohol, cigarette.

I've got to go out. See you tomorrow morning.
>> Correct!
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