¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽг»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

homework

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ÀÌ*ÁÖ
2022-06-29 1035

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

HOMEWORK:
What food do you love to make? Answer in a few sentences.

Not now, I used to make sweets like cookies, brownies, and bread and I presented them to my friends. I was happy for giving something I like as well they loved that.

There are some errors in my feed back so, I try to correct these sentence. I'd be glad if you could check.

1. Yeah, raining and wind blow much.
>> Yeah, It's so raining and windy.

7. In Korea, we say that 'Kapoor'.
>> In Korea, It's called 'Kapoor'.

Thank you Donna. Take care.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi there, Hae Ju, good evening!

I apologize again for the two items left undone in your grammar evaluation today. I am so happy however for you to check them and give alternative sentences. They are both correct, excellent job! Please do not hesitate to correct them again and again and tell me when something is not right about a sentences. This is one of the skills I want you to develop as well- to correct your own mistakes. You have done a very good job!

Anyway, regarding your homework, baking sweet treats is just so thoughtful. It costs a lot but them when you love your family and friends, it's all worth it. 

Thank you so much for this homework answer and take care too! See you soon again.

-T. Donna =)


Not now, I used to make sweets like cookies, brownies, and bread and I presented them to my friends. 
>> Correct!

I was happy for giving something I like as well they loved that.
>>  I was happy about giving something I like as well as they loved it.

There are some errors in my feed back so, I try to correct these sentence. I'd be glad if you could check.
>> Correct!

1. Yeah, raining and wind blow much.
>> Yeah, It's so raining and windy.
>> Correct!
Or: Yeah, it's so raining and windy.
Or: Yeah, raining and the wind is blowing much.

7. In Korea, we say that 'Kapoor'.
>> In Korea, It's called 'Kapoor'.
>> Correct!
Or:  In Korea, it's called 'Kapoor'.
Or: In Korea, way we say that as 'Kapoor'.

Thank you Donna. Take care.
>> Correct!

¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
122692 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-09-29 3230
122691 How has your health changed when you were younger compared to... ½Å*¼· ¿Ï·á 2022-09-29 2286
122690 Do you think colors affect your mood? How? ·ù*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-29 2845
122689 Thursday homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-09-29 2433
122688 My Homework °­*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-09-29 2099
122687 Homework ÇÔ*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-29 1
122686 homework ÃÖ*¿ø ¿Ï·á 2022-09-29 2383
122685 What benefits and drawbacks do you think working abroad has? ±è*°æ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-29 2250
122684 Distance ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-29 0
122683 Hi Gemma ÀÌ*Áø ¿Ï·á 2022-09-29 2286
122682 media ±Ç*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-29 3401
122681 Myhomework Àü*¼± ¿Ï·á 2022-09-29 2274
122680 How do you stay cool in the summer? ÀÓ*È£ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-29 1
122679 9/28 homework À±*Çö ¿Ï·á 2022-09-29 1967
122678 Food ±è*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-28 2043
122677 09.28.2022 ±è*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-28 2
122676 Home ±è*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-28 1847
122675 9/28 HOMEWORK ÀÌ*À¯ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-28 2371
122674 Homework ±è*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-28 2969
122673 Homework ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2022-09-28 0

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ ͏°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öư Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽбÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î Çϰí ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04