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What do people in your country collect?

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Nowadays, in Korea people collect some NIKE snees. In the instagram posts are full of the Nike snees application.
Actually, that collection was start by the famous k-pop singer who is GD. He collected so many snees. He spent huge money in that.And when he buy some model, that model snees was go up in price. He also made his brand and collaboration with Nike.
So many people want to his snees.

it became a trend to collect the snees. They always try to application to get the snees. In the subway I saw some people who wearing that shose. Now it is little bit become commonplace.

I don't like the Nike snees at first time. I am not interested it. I think I need a shose just one or two.. I don't need more. So I surprised those colletion. When you come to the Korea. You can see almost people wear Nike. Except for me.

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Hello Eun Chae!
Keep on writing and learn from your mistakes.  Read, speak, write, and listen to more English.  ^^

~T. Maine


Nowadays, in Korea people collect some NIKE snees. 
>>Nowadays, Koreans collect some Nike shoes. 

In the instagram posts are full of the Nike snees application.
>>On Instagram, there are a lot of posts of Nike shoes. 

Actually, that collection was start by the famous k-pop singer who is GD. 
>>Actually, that kind of collection was started by the famous K-pop singer, GD.

He collected so many snees. 
>> He collected so many shoes. 

He spent huge money in that.And when he buy some model, that model snees was go up in price.
>> He spent a huge amount of money on those and he bought some limited shoes which are expensive. 

He also made his brand and collaboration with Nike.
>>He also made his own brand and collaborated with Nike. 

So many people want to his snees.
>>So many people what his collections. 

it became a trend to collect the snees. 
>>It became a trend to collect them. 

They always try to application to get the snees. 
>>They always try to get them. 

In the subway I saw some people who wearing that shose. 
>>In the subway, I saw some people wearing those. 

Now it is little bit become commonplace.
>>Now, it is a little bit more common. 

I don't like the Nike snees at first time. 
>>I don't like those at first. 

I am not interested it. I think I need a shose just one or two.. I don't need more. 
>>I am not interested in it. 

I think I need a shose just one or two.. I don't need more. 
>>I think I want one or two more pairs of shoes even if I don't really need it. 

So I surprised those colletion. 
>>So I was surprised with those collections. 

When you come to the Korea. 
>>When you come to Korea, 

You can see almost people wear Nike. Except for me.
>>you can see most people wearing Nike except me. 






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