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Should your country accept refugees? Why or why not?

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Should your country accept refugees? Why or why not?

I think South Korea is hard to live for refugees. Because there are only few facilities to help refugees. And the price of houses is very expensive for them, especially in Seoul (It is our capital city). It¡¯s because the South Korea has small territory.
So I don¡¯t suggest them to come to the South Korea.

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Hi, Harry!
Congratulations for submitting your first homework! ^_^ You struggled to upload the texts but you still made it. 
I think you should directly write your homework here. 
By the  way, I loved reading your opinion about the matter on refugees.
I think not all countries are capable of taking them in. Even first world countries struggle to do so. 
But it's sometimes sad to see refugees not having any place to go. 
Sometimes, I think the world is unfair. T_T
Anyhow, I hope you're having a great day. ^^ 
I heard its gloomy and rainy out there again so stay warm, dry and safe. 
See you again tomorrow. ^^
~Teacher Charry



I think South Korea is hard to live for refugees. 
>> I think it's hard for South Korea to allow refugees to live here. 
Because there are only few facilities to help refugees. 
>> It's because there are only few facilities here that can help refugees. 
And the price of houses is very expensive for them, especially in Seoul (It is our capital city). 
>> In addition, the price of houses is very expensive for them especially in Seoul, which is our capital city. 
It¡¯s because the South Korea has small territory.
>> It¡¯s because South Korea is a small country. 
So I don¡¯t suggest them to come to the South Korea.
>> 
So I don¡¯t suggest them to come to South Korea.
It is hard to upload the text to files.. 
>> It is hard to upload the text to files. 
I can only write it on this one.
>> CORRECT!
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