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What is the cheapest yet valuable thing that you own?

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I think the cheapest one that I own is a program.
In a lot of online stores, we can easily buy some programs that we need for free.
We are able to buy those things if we have some digital gadgets and the internet access.
Because of this reason, I think the cheapest one that I own is a program.

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I think the cheapest one that I own is a program.
>> CORRECT

In a lot of online stores, we can easily buy some programs that we need for free.
>> CORRECT

We are able to buy those things if we have some digital gadgets and the internet access.
>> We are able to buy those things if we have some digital gadgets and internet access.

Because of this reason, I think the cheapest one that I own is a program.
>> CORRECT

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