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I left my home when I was 20 years old. My university is really far from my hometown which takes about 3 hours by a train and a car. I asked my parents to rent a house for me because I needed to spend a lot of time in the public transportations. However, my parents were not able to support me due to financial problem. Fortunately, one of my friend would like to leave his home, so we decided to live together near my school. We encountered a lot of problem but we could overcome it because we were quite young. It is not a good memory, but I can say that it helps me a lot to construct my personality. There are many advantages living alone. I know how to cook, do laundry and I am good at washing dishe but there is some disadvantages. I sometimes feel lonely and miss my mom's food. I thought it is kind of my strength but my mother in law didn't think it is worth experience for her daughter because she wanted her daughter to get married with someone who were living under the harmonious family

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I left my home when I was 20 years old. 
>> CORRECT!
My university is really far from my hometown which takes about 3 hours by a train and a car. 
>> CORRECT!
I asked my parents to rent a house for me because I needed to spend a lot of time in the public transportations. 
>> I asked my parents to rent a house for me because I needed to spend a lot of time in using public transportations. 
However, my parents were not able to support me due to financial problem. 
>> However, my parents were not able to support me due to financial problems. 
Fortunately, one of my friend would like to leave his home, so we decided to live together near my school. 
>> Fortunately, one of my friends would like to leave his home, so we decided to live together near my school. 
We encountered a lot of problem but we could overcome it because we were quite young. It is not a good memory, but I can say that it helps me a lot to construct my personality. 
>> CORRECT!
There are many advantages living alone. 
>> CORRECT!
I know how to cook, do laundry and I am good at washing dishe but there is some disadvantages. 
>> I know how to cook, do laundry, and I am good at washing dishes, but there are also some disadvantages. 
I sometimes feel lonely and miss my mom's food. 
>> CORRECT!
I thought it is kind of my strength but my mother in law didn't think it is worth experience for her daughter because she wanted her daughter to get married with someone who were living under the harmonious family
>> I thought it is one of my strengths but my mother-in-law didn't think it is a worthy experience for her daughter because she wanted her daughter to get married with someone who lives in a harmonious family.
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