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What culture in South Korea would you want to bring back?

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I want to bring back the Samulnori. Most people have enjoying music in South Korea. So It has been here for hundreds of years. But these days, people don't think about important to that due to making a living hard without the elderly. And me too. :)

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Hi Elic!  

Yes, we need to preserve our culture since it is slowly fading away due to the change in society. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

I want to bring back the Samulnori. 
>>I want to bring back the Samul Nori. 

Most people have enjoying music in South Korea. 
>> Most people enjoy music in South Korea. 

So It has been here for hundreds of years. 
>> It's been like this for hundred of years. 

But these days, people don't think about important to that due to making a living hard without the elderly. 
>> But these days, people don't think it's important anymore since everyone is busy. 

And me too. :)
>> I think so too. 
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