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What is your opinion about abortion? Should it continue to be legalized or should it be banned? Why?

작성자: 황*하
2022-07-05 645

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I have never thought about abortion because any of my family hasn't had any serious health problem during pregnancy. If my wife or baby had a disease after the embro is implanted in the mother, I would consider an abortion because I want to save my wife first and there is another chance to have a baby. Basically, I don't agree the abortion to be legalized but there should be exception for women who have health problem but I want mothers to deliever a baby even if they have already known that the baby might be disable because the baby is one of valuable life. I don't think that it is life if there aren't any structures of body in the womb. In regard to the unwanted baby, I want mother to deliver a baby even if it is not their intention, but if it they have a baby due to the criminals, I would allow them to remove their baby because mother will have a serious psychological problem.

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Good day, Sir Hwang!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

I have never thought about abortion because any of my family hasn't had any serious health problem during pregnancy. 
>> I have never thought about abortion because anyone in my family hasn't had any serious health problem during pregnancy. 
If my wife or baby had a disease after the embro is implanted in the mother, I would consider an abortion because I want to save my wife first and there is another chance to have a baby. 
>> If my wife or baby had a disease after the embryo is implanted in the mother, I would consider an abortion because I want to save my wife first and there is another chance to have a baby. 
Basically, I don't agree the abortion to be legalized but there should be exception for women who have health problem but I want mothers to deliever a baby even if they have already known that the baby might be disable because the baby is one of valuable life. 
>> Basically, I don't agree that abortion should be legalized but there should be exceptions for women who have health problems, but I want mothers to deliver a baby even if they have already known that the baby might be disabled because the baby is one of the most valuable life. 
I don't think that it is life if there aren't any structures of body in the womb. 
>> I don't think that it is life, if there aren't any structures of body in the womb. 
In regard to the unwanted baby, I want mother to deliver a baby even if it is not their intention, but if it they have a baby due to the criminals, I would allow them to remove their baby because mother will have a serious psychological problem.
>> Regarding the unwanted baby, I want the mother to deliver the baby even if it is not their intention, but if it they have a baby due to the criminals, I would allow them to remove their baby because the mother will have a serious psychological problem.
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