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What new hobbies would you like to try?

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I have many hobbies such as reading books, playing the piano and watching movies. Besides, I have more things that I want to do for my hobbies.

First of all, I want to learn how to play Korean traditional small flute because it looked good to me. And small flute sounds good to me. Also, it looked easy to learn it.

Second, I want to learn a Calligraphy, hand writing skill. Hand
writing looked beautiful to me. Hand writing is attractive to me because nowadays there are few beautiful hand writings which is caused by computer typing about.

Third, I want to be good at painting. I think if I practice painting for hobby, I could be good at painting someday.

There could have been more things for me to do for hobby. However, they are on the tip of my tongue. In addition that I don't remember them, It's time to sleep. ^^ See you later.

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Hi, Rana!

Wow! You are still you so I know that one day you would be able to try all of it.
Thank you for sharing and Good night! See you tomorrow!

~T. Roanne ^_^
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I have many hobbies such as reading books, playing the piano and watching movies. 
>> Correct!
Besides, I have more things that I want to do for my hobbies.
>> Correct!
First of all, I want to learn how to play Korean traditional small flute because it looked good to me. 
>> First of all, I want to learn how to play the Korean traditional small flute because it looks good to me. 
And small flute sounds good to me. Also, it looked easy to learn it.
>> And small flute sounds good to me. Also, it looks easy to learn it.
Second, I want to learn a Calligraphy, hand writing skill. 
>> Correct!
Handwriting looked beautiful to me. 
>> Correct!
Hand writing is attractive to me because nowadays there are few beautiful hand writings which is caused by computer typing about.
>> Correct!

Third, I want to be good at painting. 
>> Correct!
I think if I practice painting for hobby, I could be good at painting someday.
>> I think if I practice painting for a hobby, I could be good at painting someday.

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