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are older people actually wiser?

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2022-07-06 762

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Not everyone who is old is wise
It's like not all young people are smart.
But in general, as you get older, you become more conservative.
they also try to teach young people.
I never forced my values on my kids and did not suggest or teach their future.

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Hello Charley!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


Not everyone who is old is wise

>> Not everyone who is old is wise.
It's like not all young people are smart.

>> CORRECT!
But in general, as you get older, you become more conservative.

>> CORRECT!
they also try to teach young people.

>> They also try to teach young people.
I never forced my values on my kids and did not suggest or teach their future.

>> CORRECT!

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