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If you can renovate something in your house, what would it be and why?

작성자: 김*경
2022-07-07 1026

회원님의 영작문

If I could get a chance to renovate some areas in my house, I would renovate three areas.
First, I would like to remodel a kitchen because I want a more spacious room for more family members to cook together. Cooking together with children is good for them educationally and helps the family bond much stronger.
Second, I want to renovate a living room where a majority of family activities come about. Whole family members of mine spend much time in a living room. We study, read books, and even fold the laundry together in a living room. Since the old times in Korea, a living room has been considered a versatile space.
Third, I want to have an indoor garden by renovating the balcony. I think seeing many flowers blooming and falling in each season, even in the winter will be one of my pleasures. I have some old ladies who maintain a beautiful indoor garden in a balcony, and I feel envious of them whenever I see them enjoying their own garden with so many flowers in it.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Steve!  

Wow! It's very nice to hear that all of your plans are for your family. You are a terrific father! :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

If I could get a chance to renovate some areas in my house, I would renovate three areas.
>> CORRECT

First, I would like to remodel a kitchen because I want a more spacious room for more family members to cook together. 
>> First, I would like to remodel our kitchen because I want a more spacious room for more family members to cook together. 

Cooking together with children is good for them educationally and helps the family bond much stronger.
>> CORRECT

Second, I want to renovate a living room where a majority of family activities come about. 
>> Second, I want to renovate our living room, where a majority of family activities are held. 

Whole family members of mine spend much time in a living room. 
>> Our entire family spend so much time in the living room. 

We study, read books, and even fold the laundry together in a living room. 
>>  We study, read books, and even fold the laundry together in the living room. 

Since the old times in Korea, a living room has been considered a versatile space.
>> Even in the old times here in South Korea, living rooms have been considered are versatile spaces. 

Third, I want to have an indoor garden by renovating the balcony. 
>> CORRECT

I think seeing many flowers blooming and falling in each season, even in the winter will be one of my pleasures. 
>> I think seeing many flowers blooming and falling in each season will be one of my pleasures. 

I have some old ladies who maintain a beautiful indoor garden in a balcony, and I feel envious of them whenever I see them enjoying their own garden with so many flowers in it.
>> There are some old ladies  who maintain their beautiful indoor garden in their balcony and I feel envious of them whenever I see them enjoying their own garden with so many flowers in it.


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