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ESSAY: Many claim that the fast food industry had a negative effect on the environment, eating habits, and families. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I agree with that the fast food industry had negative effects.
but I will not calim for it, because I am sure that the fast food industry have also positive effects such like belows.
1. We don't have to spend our time to cook. specially in this hot summer.
2. There are many diverse food which we can choose.
3. Fast food is proper cost compare to having a meal at a restaurant.
4. Fast food is not concerned about TOP.

With my essay, I look like a fast food person.
But I am not. ^^

Have a wonderful weekend Gemma!

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Happy Friday Ms. Eunice! Friday is my most awaited day of the week! Hahaha! However, time flies so fast on weekends that before I knew it, it's already Monday. huhuhu Anyway, thank you for the helpful information and active discussion this week! Refresh and relax yourself on the weekend! I promise, I won't disturb you. hahaha See you Monday!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I agree with that the fast food industry had negative effects.
>> I agree with the claim that the fast food industry had negative effects.
but I will not calim for it, because I am sure that the fast food industry have also positive effects such like belows.
>>> But I will not claim it, because I am sure that the fast food industry also has positive effects such like as follows:
1. We don't have to spend our time to cook. specially in this hot summer.
>>> CORRECT
OR>>> 1. We don't have to spend our time to cook. specially in this hot summer season.
2. There are many diverse food which we can choose.
>>> There are diverse food which we can choose.
>>> There are many food which we can choose.
3. Fast food is proper cost compare to having a meal at a restaurant.
>>> 3. Fast food is more affordable compared to having a meal at a restaurant.
4. Fast food is not concerned about TOP.
>>> CORRECT
With my essay, I look like a fast food person.
>>> With my essay, I seem to be a person who's into fast food.
But I am not. ^^
>>> CORRECT

Have a wonderful weekend Gemma! ( YOU TOO) 


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