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Q:Is it better for kids to have siblings?
A:I think it's better for kids to have siblings.
They can develop their sociality by bonding with their siblings.
Also, they can make many other social skills by doing something with their siblings.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I think it's better for kids to have siblings.

>> CORRECT!
They can develop their sociality by bonding with their siblings.

>> They can develop their sociability by bonding with their siblings.
Also, they can make many other social skills by doing something with their siblings.

>> Also, they can develop a lot of social skills by doing something with their siblings.

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