¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽг»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Homework

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ±è*¿ì
2022-07-14 1230

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

Good morning again, Donna!
It's sunny outside.
How about your place?
This morning class, I saw a shiny window behind you.
Is it correct?
I never thought there is a window behind you.
Meanwhile there are bad news in my clinic.
Some coordinater didn't show up on time.
I think she should quit the job because she has many problems about work time.
Furthermore I heard that the staff who is middle of hospitalization have to be treated for long times.
This morning starts so bad, but we have to get over all of problems.
Now this is my homework.
After retirement, I want to do many things.
I want to have a land in good position, and build a beautiful house.
After that, I can grow some plants, fruits and animals.
One of my hopes is to get fresh eggs from my hen.
Isn't it funny?
I might be able to invite my friends and families, we could sing, cook, drink together.
And, I want to share my peaceful life to other people via Youtube or something like that.
What about you?

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi there, good high noon, Dr. Kim!

It rained for a while but the sun is back somehow, then rains again. Yes, I have a window behind me and I move my curtains on the sides when it is bright. When we were studying before, it was too early at 5:15am and my neighbors can see me outside when I turn on the light and it is still dark outside.^^ Anyway, I think your clinic is a little bit problematic lately. Your saving grace are situations such as the weather that gave you a few clients yesterday and your other staffs left to coordinate. I guess you might need team building activities soon.

Now for your homework, I find peace and tranquility in your plan of building a home surrounded by a garden and animals. That sounds like a paradise! At the onset of COVID-19, I bought my home and made a manageable front yard composed of pretty flowers, herbs, and some vegetables! Since there are a lot of cats from my neighbor, I cannot own a pet. However, we have dogs and rabbits in my parents' house we take care of. I thought, it feels like retirement everyday working from home and waking up with the butterflies and also the cats passing by in front of my doorsteps. Your retirement dream is truly the dream of many. Being a YouTuber nonetheless will not make it very peaceful.^^ But if you are up for it, then send me the video link or page for me to watch someday!

MIne is to be an influencer or a speaker influencing youth, women, among others. My retirement is no retirement. I want to be active until my last breath. Is this too much?

Thank you so much for submitting your homework answer punctually! As with the other days, your sentences were very clearly stated, the style is so unique, and it was very engaging to read and comment on. Excellent job!

See you on this page again soon. Enjoy the rest of your day!

-T. Donna~

Good morning again, Donna!
>> Correct!

It's sunny outside.
>> Correct!

How about your place?
>> Correct!

This morning class, I saw a shiny window behind you.
>> Correcy!

Is it correct?
>> Correct!

I never thought there is a window behind you.
>> Correct!

Meanwhile there are bad news in my clinic.
>> Correct!

Some coordinater didn't show up on time.
>> A coordinator didn't show up on time.

I think she should quit the job because she has many problems about work time.
>> Correct!

Furthermore I heard that the staff who is middle of hospitalization have to be treated for long times.
>> Furthermore, I heard that the staff who is in the middle of hospitalization have to be treated for a long time.

This morning starts so bad, but we have to get over all of problems.
>> This morning started so bad, but we have to get over all of these problems.

Now this is my homework.
>> Correct!

After retirement, I want to do many things.
>> Correct!

I want to have a land in good position, and build a beautiful house.
>>  I want to have a land in good location and build a beautiful house.

After that, I can grow some plants, fruits and animals.
>> Correct!
Or: After that, I can grow some plants, fruits, and animals. (Place a comma after the word 'fruits'.) 

One of my hopes is to get fresh eggs from my hen.
>> Correct!

Isn't it funny?
>> Correct!

I might be able to invite my friends and families, we could sing, cook, drink together.
>> Correct!

And, I want to share my peaceful life to other people via Youtube or something like that.
>> And, I want to share my peaceful life to other people via Youtube or something like that.

What about you?
>> Correct!
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
123181 Homework ¼Û*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2022-10-24 2540
123180 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-10-24 2863
123179 homework ¹Ú*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2022-10-24 2
123178 When do you need your family most? ÀÌ*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2022-10-24 3426
123177 What kind of games do you like? ÀÌ*Áø ¿Ï·á 2022-10-24 5
123176 What is emotional intelligence? How emotionally intelligent are... ÅÂ*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2022-10-24 3048
123175 H0mework ±è*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2022-10-24 3822
123174 Choose a novel and write something about it. ±è*À² ¿Ï·á 2022-10-24 3214
123173 homework Á¤*È£ ¿Ï·á 2022-10-24 1
123172 homework ¹Ú*Àº ¿Ï·á 2022-10-24 0
123171 Monday Homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-10-24 3168
123170 Homework ÇÔ*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2022-10-24 1
123169 Complete the sentences below with one of the following words: ½Å*°ü ¿Ï·á 2022-10-24 1
123168 Traveling ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2022-10-24 2
123167 What is the funniest book you have ever read? ÀÓ*È£ ¿Ï·á 2022-10-24 2
123166 How does alcohol change your behavior, personality, and face? Àü*ä ¿Ï·á 2022-10-23 2523
123165 10.19.2022 ±è*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2022-10-23 1
123164 What are the advantages and disadvantages of attending concerts? ±è*±¹ ¿Ï·á 2022-10-23 2
123163 Homework ÀÌ*°æ ¿Ï·á 2022-10-23 2772
123162 Is there a food that you will never eat? ±è*±¹ ¿Ï·á 2022-10-22 2

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ ͏°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öư Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽбÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î Çϰí ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04