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i'm a teacher of math academy for elementary student. i love my job because my students not only act kindly but also do their homework very well. but you know, kids sometimes act like devil right? and some demanding parents make me headache because they belive their kids are must be genius. but i know that every jobs have hard moments so i don't care about bad parts of my job.

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Hello Robin!
Thank you for answering the question.  Learn from your mistakes and follow the correct grammar patterns of English.  Always read your corrections so it will be easier for you to get used to them. ^^


~T. Maine


i'm a teacher of math academy for elementary student. 
>>I'm a teacher of math in the academy for elementary students. 
i love my job because my students not only act kindly but also do their homework very well. 
>> I love my job because of my students who do not act kindly but also do their homework very well. 
but you know, kids sometimes act like devil right? and some demanding parents make me headache because they belive their kids are must be genius.
>> But you know, kids sometimes act badly and they are naughty.  And some demanding parents make me have a headache because they believe their kids must be genius. 
 but i know that every jobs have hard moments so i don't care about bad parts of my job.
>> But I know that every job has difficult moments so I don't care about the negative things about my job. 

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