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Are men better chefs than women or are women better chefs than men?

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Frankly speaking, I don't know well. There's no dish that is not delicious because men or women make it. I'd like the one who is good cook better. The skill must be just efforts and talent.

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Hello Rachel!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


Frankly speaking, I don't know well. 

>> CORRECT!


There's no dish that is not delicious because men or women make it. 

>> There's no dish that is not delicious because a man or a woman made it. 

I'd like the one who is good cook better. 

>> I'd like the one who is better at cooking.


The skill must be just efforts and talent.

>> The skill must have come from efforts and talent.

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