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I even know that smartphone zombies are very dangerous.

So in my school, student council made the rules last month.

Don't use it on the street, especially when coming to school and going to home, you have to keep it in your.bag not in your hand.

Thers is no penalty but we are guiding and teaching with parents.

I don't agree prohibition action. That is not solution.

We have to persuade children why you have to use it right for your safe and life.

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Good day, Ms. Lily!
Thank you for letting me know your thought. I hope that we can come up with a solution or ways how to encourage children not to engross themselves on smartphones.
Have a great day!
Aki~
I even know that smartphone zombies are very dangerous.
>>> CORRECT!
So in my school, student council made the rules last month.
>>> So in my school, the student council made the rules last month.
Don't use it on the street, especially when coming to school and going home, you have to keep it in your bag, not in your hand.
>>> CORRECT!
There is no penalty but we are guiding and teaching with parents.
>>>  There is no penalty but we are guiding and teaching them with their parents.
I don't agree prohibition action. That is not solution.
>>>  I don't agree with prohibition action. That is not the solution.
We have to persuade children why you have to use it right for your safe and life.
>>> We have to persuade children why they have to use it right for their safety.


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