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School uniform does not stop bullying and may increase violent attacks. How?

작성자: 이*연
2022-07-26 872

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I agree with this statement that wearing school uniforms does not stop bullying. Because I think bullying happens because of attackers' wrong personalities and values rather than wearing school uniforms itself. However, it is a little bit doubtful that wearing school uniforms can increase violent attacks. Even if wearing school uniforms is not a duty for students, violent issues can always happen. Attackers may try to find trivial issues in victims except for school uniforms. For example, attackers can make victims feel humiliated by comparing brand names of clothes.

If there is a statistical result showing that wearing school uniforms may increase violent attacks, it is because of the possibility of invisible violent attacks. School uniforms seem the same, and attackers can use this characteristic. For example, they can steal victims' neckties and pants uniforms however, it is difficult to be disclosed.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Helena!
Just like what we've discussed during the lesson, uniforms may or may not have an effect when it comes to bullying but not everything is negative when it comes to wearing school uniforms.
-T. Caitlyn
I agree with this statement that wearing school uniforms does not stop bullying. Because I think bullying happens because of attackers' wrong personalities and values rather than wearing school uniforms itself. 
>> I agree with this statement that wearing school uniforms does not stop bullying because I think bullying happens because of attackers' wrong personalities and values rather than wearing school uniforms itself. 
However, it is a little bit doubtful that wearing school uniforms can increase violent attacks. 
>> CORRECT
Even if wearing school uniforms is not a duty for students, violent issues can always happen. 
>> CORRECT
Attackers may try to find trivial issues in victims except for school uniforms. 
>> CORRECT
For example, attackers can make victims feel humiliated by comparing brand names of clothes.
>> CORRECT
If there is a statistical result showing that wearing school uniforms may increase violent attacks, it is because of the possibility of invisible violent attacks. 
>> CORRECT
School uniforms seem the same, and attackers can use this characteristic. 
>> CORRECT
For example, they can steal victims' neckties and pants uniforms however, it is difficult to be disclosed.
>> For example, stealing one's necktie or pants since it will be difficult to distinguish whose property it is.
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