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My hometown was called ¡°Boksagol¡±. - Peach called Bok Soong Ah, In Korea. - It means the area where peaches are product a lot. This is because Bucheon was very clean city. However, 1970s, the government announced that Seoul and around the Seoul will redevelop. Finally, whole farmer in Bucheon left to countryside and Bucheon became new born as industrial city. So 1990s~2000s, Bucheon¡¯s air was terrible because of a massive number of factories and smokestacks. In addition, there is only one the airport in Bucheon so very noisy city. Nowaday, fortunately, botanical garden is opening and smokestacks are moving to outskirt and restoring. I heard that Seoul airport can moving to another city for restore Bucheon, maybe. I desire that is.

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Hi, Yeong Ho!
Thank you for doing your homework and sharing with me the history of your hometown!
-T. Caitlyn
My hometown was called ¡°Boksagol¡±. 
>> CORRECT
- Peach called Bok Soong Ah, In Korea. 
>> Peach is called Bok Soong Ah in Korea.
- It means the area where peaches are product a lot. 
>> It's the place where are a lot of peaches are produced. 
This is because Bucheon was very clean city. 
>> This is because Bucheon was a very clean city. 
However, 1970s, the government announced that Seoul and around the Seoul will redevelop. 
>> However, in the 1970s, the government announced that Seoul and the areas around it will be redevelop. 
Finally, whole farmer in Bucheon left to countryside and Bucheon became new born as industrial city. 
>> So farmers in Bucheon left the countryside and Bucheon became an industrialized city. 
So 1990s~2000s, Bucheon¡¯s air was terrible because of a massive number of factories and smokestacks. 
>> From 1990 to the 2000s, Bucheon¡¯s air was terrible because of a massive number of factories and smokestacks. 
In addition, there is only one the airport in Bucheon so very noisy city. 
>> In addition, there is only one airport in Bucheon so it's very noisy. 
Nowaday, fortunately, botanical garden is opening and smokestacks are moving to outskirt and restoring. 
>> Nowadays, fortunately, a botanical garden is opening, and smokestacks are moving to the outskirt.
I heard that Seoul airport can moving to another city for restore Bucheon, maybe. 
>> I heard that Seoul airport will be moved to another city for the restoration of Bucheon.
I desire that is.
>> I hope that's true.
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