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Can you tell me something about your major and the reason you chose it?

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first of all... i majored in business and the reason why i chose this major is because i wanna be a CEO. you know own my company sounds pretty cool right? and i can be a rich person. but when i getting older i know it is very hard to establish own company
because i must have not only creative business ideas but also a lot of money. so i just suspend to have my company. and i change my plan
now i wanna go to HRdepartment for use my major

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Hello Robin!
It's nice to read your answer today, but take note of your patterns and try to use some pronouns instead of repeating the same words.  Try to make other sentences using the correct patterns given for you to easily memorize them.  ^^



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first of all... i majored in business and the reason why i chose this major is because i wanna be a CEO. 
>>First of all, I majored in business and the reason why I chose this was because I want to be a CEO. 
you know own my company sounds pretty cool right? and i can be a rich person. but when i getting older i know it is very hard to establish own company
>> You know having my own company sounds pretty cool, right?  
I can be a rich person but when I get older I know it is very hard to establish my own company. 
because i must have not only creative business ideas but also a lot of money. 
>> It is because I must have not only creative business ideas but also a lot of money. 
so i just suspend to have my company. and i change my plan
>> So I just postpone it and change my plan. 
now i wanna go to HRdepartment for use my major
>> Now, I want to go to the HR department to use my major. 

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