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How do you think can racism be stopped?

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As other cases discrimination, I think we need to educate about racism more and more.
Racism is caused by our wrong ideas about our races.
And the reason why there are wrong ideas is some people were educated wrong.
Because of this reason, I think I think we need to educate about racism if we want to stop racism.

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Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

As other cases discrimination, I think we need to educate about racism more and more.
>> As other cases discrimination, I think we need to educate people about the harm of racism. 

Racism is caused by our wrong ideas about our races.
>> Racism is caused by our wrong interpretation about our races. 

And the reason why there are wrong ideas is some people were educated wrong.
>> 
And the reason why there are wrong ideas is because some people are educated wrongly. 

Because of this reason, I think I think we need to educate about racism if we want to stop racism.
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