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I prefer spending time with my family and friends. I like talking with my friends. We can share our opinion, and think about silly things. Also, I¡¯m relaxed when I¡¯m with my family. The world without my family is so lonely on my think. Because, only family always with me and trust me. Therefore, I think family is important for me and I prefer spending time with my family and friends.

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Hi Bella!
Don't forget the simple grammar rules that you learn by writing your homework.
They can help you in your daily conversations.
Just apply them as much as you can.
You can definitely improve that way.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I prefer spending time with my family and friends. 
>> Correct
I like talking with my friends. 
>> Correct
We can share our opinion, and think about silly things. 
>> We can share our opinions, and talk about silly things. 
Also, I¡¯m relaxed when I¡¯m with my family. 
>> Correct
The world without my family is so lonely on my think. 
>> I think a world without my family would be so lonely.
Because, only family always with me and trust me. 
>> It's because my family is always with me and they trust me.
Therefore, I think family is important for me and I prefer spending time with my family and friends.
>> Therefore, I think family is important to me and I prefer spending time with my family and friends.
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