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Are goals necessary to achieve success? Why or why not?

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Goals are necessary to achieve success even if small things.
It is because success requires motivate. like goals.
We're success life might be hard and difficult.
We need to try to success hard.
So we might give up final goals and reconsider.
we need to make a plan simple small things frist.
Like that, Wake up early in the morning to study English than we just wake up early first. that is a little goal and we already success one thing. Feeling accomplishment helps that not to give up to success. We might make plans getting more and harder in step by step.
Then we can touch the success what we wants.

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Hello Eun Chae!
Thanks for accomplishing this homework.  Read the corrections and if you have questions, ask me in class. ^^


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Goals are necessary to achieve success even if small things.
>>Correct.
It is because success requires motivate. like goals.
>>It is because success requires motivation like goals. 
We're success life might be hard and difficult.
>>Achieving success in life might be hard and difficult. 
We need to try to success hard.
>> We need to try to work harder. 
So we might give up final goals and reconsider.
>>So there are times we might give up our goals and reconsider them. 
we need to make a plan simple small things frist.
>>We need to make simple plans for small things first. 
Like that, Wake up early in the morning to study English than we just wake up early first. 
>>For example, we should wake up early to study English in the morning.
that is a little goal and we already success one thing. 
>> That is a small goal and we can be successful with that one thing. 
Feeling accomplishment helps that not to give up to success. 
>>Feeling of accomplishment helps us not to give up our goals. 
We might make plans getting more and harder in step by step.
>>We might make plans getting harder in the next step.
Then we can touch the success what we wants.
>>Then we can reach the success we want. 

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