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Do you think that human beings can learn anything from animals?

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Yes, I think that human beings can learn anything from animals, because there are cases when their behaviors are better than human beings. For example, most of animals do their best to protect their youngs. However, some people do something serious like child abuse. Because of this, there are many cases when animals's behavior is better than human beings. So, I hope that people, including me learn anything from animals.

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Hi, Kimberly! 


I appreciate the time you put into accomplishing your homework. I am happy with your progress in writing; let us be careful of our punctuations^^ 

Regarding your answer, I agree that animals and humans share similarities like protecting offspring and having culture. 

It's great that you learn things from animals at a young age. I admire that about you. 


See you in class!

~ Teacher Gela


Yes, I think that human beings can learn anything from animals, because there are cases when their behaviors are better than human beings. 
>> Yes, I think that human beings can learn anything from animals because there are cases when their behaviors are better than human beings. 
For example, most of animals do their best to protect their youngs. 
>> For example, most animals do their best to protect their young. 
However, some people do something serious like child abuse. 
>> CORRECT
Because of this, there are many cases when animals's behavior is better than human beings. 
>> Because of this, there are many cases when animals' behavior is better than human beings. 
So, I hope that people, including me learn anything from animals.
>> So, I hope that people, including me, learn anything from animals.
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