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Talk about successful people you look up to, tell something about what they do, their accomplishment

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The successful people I look up to are the people who run the cafe and the doctors who take care of the sick and operate.
The person who runs the cafe makes the drinks that customers want.
The doctor examines, helps, and treats sick people.
The reason is that the person who runs the cafe can make money just by making drinks, and the doctor treats and saves people.

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Hello, Stella! ^^
Thank you for the composition.
See you in our next class! :)

~ Teacher Tricia


The successful people I look up to are the people who run the cafe and the doctors who take care of the sick and operate.
>>> CORRECT!

The person who runs the cafe makes the drinks that customers want.
>>> CORRECT!

The doctor examines, helps, and treats sick people.
>>> CORRECT!

The reason is that the person who runs the cafe can make money just by making drinks, and the doctor treats and saves people.
>>> CORRECT!
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