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What do you think are the most important qualities a president should have (and why)?

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What do you think are the most important qualities a president should have (and why)?

I¡¯m not interested in politics but I can distinguish what¡¯s going on to good or bad way. The most important qualities that a president should have is not his/her belief. This position should be all ears to people. A president should has an interest the public problems even trivial problems not him/her individual problems. There is some representative president in Korea, called, Genhye Park. She got resigned by people. She did some of greedy activies in secretiviely. Indeed, she betrayed the public. In order not to see like this case, I think faithful and clean-minded person should run for president.

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Hi, Harry! :)
Thank you for writing this essay. I agree that only honest individuals should run for president. 
Sadly, most politicians are greedy and selfish. 
I hope one day, you will have an honest and very competitive president in your country. 
Have a wonderful day Harry! :)
See you again in class on Wednesday. ^^
~Teacher Charry

I¡¯m not interested in politics but I can distinguish what¡¯s going on to good or bad way. 
>> I¡¯m not interested in politics but I can distinguish the good or the bad way.
The most important qualities that a president should have is not his/her belief. 
>> The most important qualities that a president should have do not lie in his/her beliefs.
This position should be all ears to people. 
>> In this position, he/she should be all ears to people. 
A president should has an interest the public problems even trivial problems not him/her individual problems. 
>> A president should be more interested with the public problems even with the trivial ones and not with his/her individual problems. 
There is some representative president in Korea, called, Genhye Park. 
>> There is a presidential representative in Korea by the name, Genhye Park. 
She got resigned by people. 
>> She was forced by the people to resign. 
She did some of greedy activies in secretiviely. 
>> She did some greedy activities in secret.
Indeed, she betrayed the public. 
>> CORRECT!
In order not to see like this case, I think faithful and clean-minded person should run for president.
>> In order not to see cases like this, I think a faithful and clear-minded person should run for president.
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