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ESSAY: It is better for young people to get advice from old people than young ones. Do you agree or disagree?

I disagree that to get advice from old people is better than from young ones.
I donnot agree that old people are wiser by more life experiences than young ones.
Form time to time, I am surprised when I meet old and stubburn people.
When I discuss somthing with old people, they always insist on their way with the reason that they are older than I without any understandable explanations.
There are many peole who is more mature and intellectual compare to their age.
Knowlege is stored by not letting time goes but trying to study hard.
I believe that advice comes from the deepest understanding the person who is in front of me.

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Good morning Ms. Eunice! ^^ It's a cold morning now, and the hen is crying out loud. Hahaha! I seem to be living in the countryside. Hahaha!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I disagree that to get advice from old people is better than from young ones.
>>>CORRECT
I donnot agree that old people are wiser by more life experiences than young ones.
>>>I do not agree that old people are wiser by having more life experiences than young ones.
From time to time, I am surprised when I meet old and stubborn people.
>>>CORRECT
When I discuss something with old people, they always insist their way with the reason that they are older than I am without any understandable explanations.
>>>CORRECT
There are many people who is more mature and intellectual compared to their age.
>>>CORRECT
Knowledge is stored by not letting time goes by but trying to study hard.
>>>CORRECT
I believe that advice comes from the deepest understanding of the person who is in front of me.
>>>CORRECT
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