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Hi there, Donna.
As I told you, we have a meeting of punishment.
We told her that she will get a salary with lower incentives for this month, and she agreed with that.
Sadly, I've trusted her absolutely.
So, I am very disappointed with her.
However, she did her work so well, and I should admit her efforts to our clinic.
Back to my homework, I always think that giving a money to my people is better than lending.
Of course, if I don't have enough money, I cannot give lots of money to someone.
Just think this way.
Suppose that you have enough money.
If you lost some parts of money, you can live without any discomfort.
So, you had better think about the affordable amount of money.
And, just give it to someone.
This is what I think about helping my people with money.
On the other hand, you should not guarantee your friends for borrowing money.
It's too dangerous, and you probably face to difficult situation.
Consequently, It will destroy your life.
This is my answer.
See you tomorrow~

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Good evening, Dr. Kim!

It is good to know that you have finally resolved about your rules and policies about office misdemeanor and other offenses in your clinic. As an organization or company grows, such are also the problems. Thus, to avoid anarchy, rules, policies, and guidelines ought to be set. Just hope that everyone will abide by them.

Regarding money matters, donating or giving some amount won't hurt. As you have mentioned, imagining money that you can afford to lose is alright rather than lending an amount that you hope will come back but would never be. Lending is similar to gambling as it is risky and it is money considered lost. Truly, giving money as a gift does not hurt that much specially to people who really need it like our family and good friends.

Thank you very much for the rational and logical discussion of your answer here.  Some of my suggestions were underlined while others have been deleted from the sentences. So, go over them well when you find time.

Have a pleasant evening.

-T. Donna~

Hi there, Donna.
>> Correct!

As I told you, we have a meeting of punishment.
>> As I told you, we have a meeting about punishment.

We told her that she will get a salary with lower incentives for this month, and she agreed with that.
>> Correct!

Sadly, I've trusted her absolutely.
>> Correct!

So, I am very disappointed with her.
>> Correct!

However, she did her work so well, and I should admit her efforts to our clinic.
>> Correct!

Back to my homework, I always think that giving a money to my people is better than lending.
>> Back to my homework, I always think that giving money to people is better than lending.

Of course, if I don't have enough money, I cannot give lots of money to someone.
>> Correct!

Just think this way.
>> Correct!

Suppose that you have enough money.
>> Suppose you have enough money.

If you lost some parts of money, you can live without any discomfort.
>> Correct!
Or: If you lose some of money, you can live without any discomfort.

So, you had better think about the affordable amount of money.
>> Correct!

And, just give it to someone.
>> Correct!

This is what I think about helping my people with money.
>> Correct!

On the other hand, you should not guarantee your friends for borrowing money.
>> Correct!

It's too dangerous, and you probably face to difficult situation.
>> 
It's too dangerous, and you will probably face a difficult situation.

Consequently, It will destroy your life.
>> Correct!
Or: Consequently, it will destroy your life.

This is my answer.
>> Correct!

See you tomorrow~
>> Correct!
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