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Title: My Dream Vacation

I always had a passion about study when the vacation is approaching.
When the vacation starts, I set a goal about study. In the beginning, I studied as planned.
However I'm gradually losing track of my plans. So my dream vacation is to keep the plan well.

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Thank you for taking the time to answer you homework today, Emma. Great job! Your sentences are very good. You were able to talk about the topic and your sentences had complete thought. You see? I told you, you can do it! I'm so proud of you! :)


I always had a passion about study when the vacation is approaching.
>> I always had a passion for studying whenever vacation is approaching.
When the vacation starts, I set a goal about study.
>> At the start of my vacation, I set my goal to study.
In the beginning, I studied as planned.
>> Correct.
However I'm gradually losing track of my plans.
>> However, I'm gradually losing track of my plans.
So my dream vacation is to keep the plan well.
>> So my dream vacation is to stay well on track with my plan.
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